Indian-Girls taken by Beth Whitman at wanderlustandlipstick.com

Previously, Subha Shini had sent me a story she had written, asking if I could help her make it better. You read about the response I sent her.

Here are the two drafts she sent back to me.

Draft 1

Even when a pastor prayed and delivered her mother from demon possession; Manjula a 1st PUC student was not serious about her relationship with Jesus.

Manjula met our staff Mrs. Kumari in her neighborhood conducting Bible study for the youths: Manjula started attending the group regularly and the truth that she learnt from the Word of God helped her to grow in her relationship with Christ.

A few months latter Manjula attended a camp conducted by Campus Crusade: unlike her initial response to Christ  she met Pavithra a Hindu girl and shared about Chrisr to her; ‘since we both belong to the same religion and community. I could relate well with her ‘ says Manjula.

After attending the training in Evangelisim and Discipleship camp conducted on 12th to 14th January Manjula says i had a desire to share gospel with others and I am glad I could do that during this camp. ‘I now realize that it is my responsibility to let my friends know that Jesus is the true living God.’

Either draft works, depending on the point you are trying to make. Erik (taught with us in India) has taught me something more about writing stories. He says find the motivation for why people do what they do. In other words, why is each person in your story behaving the way they do. Sometimes you have to look at which person you have the most information about. Think with me. Who is this story really about?

Is it about Manjula? She’s the student who shows up in every paragraph. Her life changes so that she becomes more serious about her relationship with God.

Is this story about her mother or the pastor? Not this time, even though the pastor prays with power and authority and her mother’s life change, we only see them in the first paragraph.\

Is this story about Mrs. Kumari? God uses Mrs. Kumari to train and to disciple Manjula, but we don’t know enough about Mrs. Kumari’s life to make the story about her.

Is this story about Pavithra? Her life changes, but we know more about why Manjula shares the gospel with her than we do about Pavithra and her story.

So, let’s decide this story is about Manjula. We want to show how and why her life changes. Events tell how her life changed. Background tells why her life changed.

So the focus is something like: Manjula moves from not being very serious about her relationship with Christ to becoming serious enough to actually experience the good news of the gospel and share it easily with someone else. How did it happen? Your story will explain it.

While both drafts tell this story, and, depending on your audience, either one could work, I like draft one the best because events happen in a beginning-to-end sequence. I can follow the progression logically without having to look back and then look forward again.

Your second draft starts at the end where Manjula is sharing the gospel with Pavithra. In my opinion, the part that’s missing is why it is so significant that this event is happening. On first look, Pavithra’s life is the one that is about to be changed. To make this work, you would have to include a sentence like: Explaining the gospel didn’t always come easily to Manjula. In fact, there was a time when she didn’t care about her relationship with Christ.

Then you could move into the story about the pastor praying for her mother followed by the training Mrs. Kumari gave her in her neighborhood. Then end with with her saying the quote at camp.

In this case, draft one is done. It accomplishes everything you want it to.

There is always more than one way to tell a story. If you were given the same information Subha Shini had been given, how might you have told this story?

Levi, a machinist, has never taken a college class. Yet in his spare time, he and his wife, Katie, lead a Cru ministry that helps about 70 students on four Kansas campuses—Butler, Hutchinson, WichitaState and Emporia—grow as disciples of Jesus.

How do they do it? Of course they rely on God’s strength and on the Holy Spirit. They lean on each other, and Levi’s brother, a former Cru staff member, can offer advice.

Beyond that, Levi spends an hour or so on the phone every week with Ben, a friend of ours.Ben and others on his team coach partners like Levi as they make disciples on campuses across the United States. The coaches have served on campuses, and recognize that their experience can be multiplied this way.

I heard about Levi and Katie as we planned upcoming issues of Worldwide Challenge magazine. Their story could be a good fit for our magazine. Our purpose is to show how God is at work through Cru staff members and partners—people like Ben and Levi and Katie—and to challenge our readers to help make Christ known. Maybe Levi and Katie will serve as an example for some our readers. They might begin to make disciples on campuses or other places where they live and work.

Beyond the magazine, we’re helping people from many parts of Cru tell stories like this one for their audiences. Anne Marie is preparing to train staff members with our athletic and inner city ministries in Ohio when we travel back there for four days in March. (In the photo above, Anne Marie stops on her way to our one-day training in Ohio last October.) In the meantime, she’s been invited to train a group of women leaders at our headquarters and to help some members of the JESUS Film Project communicate better.

We’re grateful for your prayers as we continue to see God meet our needs and open new doors of ministry opportunities for us. As you think of us this month, please pray for wise planning and clear communication as we continue to train writers. Also, please pray that we will find more great stories like Levi and Katie’s so people can see God’s glory as He shows His love for people on campuses in Kansas and everywhere around the world.

Happy New Year! How did you celebrate the entry of 2014? With a party? With the family in the comfort of your home?

We welcomed in the New Year playing Uno using an ironing board as a table and then drinking sparkling juice out of paper cups at midnight at a motel in Holdrege, Neb. My parents have seen enough years start and don’t stay up until midnight anymore.

We were in my hometown the week after Christmas to be part of a wedding reception for my brother. Although it was a great family time, the cold and snow reminded us why we prefer Orlando’s winter weather.

Now we’re back home. Michael is at the University of Central Florida and Bethany is at Trevecca Nazarene University. They have both started their new semesters, and we’re both back at work. In addition to our ongoing roles, Anne Marie and I are tackling two major projects.

We continue to work on the next training events to help our fellow Cru staff members become better writers, and Anne Marie met with two staff members here at our headquarters to coach them in writing. This is the result of Anne Marie’s six years of developing Writing For Life. I’m glad that our magazine team benefits from the training and that this gives us a chance to work together to help others become better communicators.

We’re also working to meet with friends in Florida to talk about our ministry with Cru. We are praying that about 20 more families will join our team of ministry partners.

Please pray for us as we tackle both of these projects. Specifically,
• Please ask God to give us wisdom as we set the dates for the upcoming training, plan the conference contents and invite people from across the United States.
• Ask God to help us connect with people, whom He is calling to join our ministry team.
• Continue to pray for Bethany and Michael—especially that they will develop strong, beneficial relationships with people around them on their respective campuses.

Thanks for your prayers, generosity and role in our lives in this new year.